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| Dragonball BNW; A continuation of the series following GT. | |
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| Model_O | Oct 16 2012, 01:00 AM Post #1 |
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Prologue It has been 4 years since Goku left the planet earth following the Shadow Dragon crisis, Vegeta is the new protector of Earth, along with Goten, Trunks, Pan and Uub. Very little has happened since the Shadow Dragons assault on earth, but Vegeta is insistent that the remaining Z-Fighters stay in shape. We see Trunks and Goten preparing to sparwhile Vegeta watches on. Trunks: Alright Goten, you ready? Goten slicks his hair back Goten: Lets see what you've got Trunks! Trunks and Goten rush towards eachother and begin brawling, with each one countering eachothers strikes, both are evenly matched, Trunks lets one slip and Goten hits a right hook, Trunks is knocked back and Goten Afterimages behind him, catching him with a knee to the back, Trunks gains offense and turns around, Locking Goten in a front facelock, he then tosses him towards a tree, sending him crashing through it. Trunks: Ohhhh! Tough Luck Goten! Suddenly, Trunks' cocky smile turns into a look of concern, we hear the sound of Ki charging. Goten: KAAAAAMEEEEEE HAAAA MEEEE HAAA!!!! We see a Kamehameha blast through the wooded area, Trunks bends backwards and the blast just barely misses him, Trunks straightens his posture and catches a kick to the head, he staggers down to his knees and Goten delivers another kick to his head, knocking him 10 feet to the right, Goten rushes towards Trunks. Vegeta: ENOUGH! Goten stops and powers down, he goes to help Trunks up, but Trunks slaps his hand away. Trunks: Goten, What the Hell? This was just a spar! Vegeta: Don't give Goten any problems Trunks, you held back! Treat all fights as serious, be it a practice or not. Trunks: Dad, you can't make us fight like this! Somebody is going to get hurt. Vegeta: I always stop the fight when I see necessary, go get yourself a drink of water and rest up, tomorrow I want you to go all out. Trunks stands up, visibly angry and walks away, he enters his home and we see Bulma sipping some tea and working on a new device. Bulma: How was training honey? Trunks: Terrible, I hate Dad's brutal new training regiment. Bulma: Now Trunks, that's just your fathers way, besides he wouldn't let you actually get hurt...that badly. Trunks sits down and pours himself some tea. Trunks: Yeah, I know but still. Sometimes I miss Gohan being the leader of our group, he may not have been the strongest, but he taught us technique instead of sheer force and brutal assault. Bulma: Gohan chose to stray away from fighting for a reason, he put alot of hard work into being strong at a young age, but then he stopped abruptly. Trunks: Yeah I know, it's sad, he had the potential to be more powerful than both Father and Goku, but maybe he can still teach me some techniques! Where is he living now? Bulma: He still lives in the city if I am not mistaken, you should go see him. Trunks: Not a bad idea mom! Don't tell dad though. Trunks gives his mother a hug and then leaves for the city, flying high with a look of determination. Chapter 1 Realization We see the Z-Fighters, minus Trunks. Talking to each other in a vast valley. Goten, Pan and Uub sit while Vegeta stands, giving a speech to his friends. Vegeta:Everyone, it has been 4 years to the day since Kakarot left us, we don't know when he will return, even if he will ever return. But the fact is, he left me in charge of things. We are the few beings that can protect this earth if it is ever threatened, we are the last of the Sayians, and Uub you are the last of the Human's powerful enough to do anything. The point I am trying to make is, we won't be around forever. Vegeta powers up to super sayian. Vegeta: As our bloodline wears down, our descendants will lose abilities, we are unsure if female Sayians can even transform into super Sayian. We need to prepare for the future, that is why I am pushing everyone so hard. Goten stands up Goten: Vegeta, what are you saying? Vegeta sighs. Vegeta: I am saying that I may have reached my full potential, my limit of power. Maybe its age, maybe its a natural occurrence, but the fact is I need to make sure you are all prepared for the day that I can no longer fight. Uub: Vegeta, don't talk like that. Vegeta: No, I have trained extremely hard for the past 4 years and my power hasn't increased at all, I have reached my full limit. Goten, you and Trunks are only able to reach the first level of super sayian, this needs to change, I will tell you what I am going to tell my son, for the next while I am going to be brutal and hard on both of you, and you may grow to hate me for it, but in the end it will be the best option. As for Pan and Uub, no disrespect to you, but you two are on your own, I have to focus all my effort on the best possible future this planet has. So as of now I am dismissing you from the group. Pan and Uub look furious. Pan: What? Vegeta: Uub, you are a human and a strong one at that, but your help is no longer needed, for your own safety I am dismissing you. In the future, if any threat arises, stay out and Pan, you and Bulla are the last hope, not just for the planet, but for the Sayian Race, I cannot risk anything happening to you. Pan stands up. Pan: Vegeta, I understand your concern, but I can fight! I know I have the power inside me! I just know it! Vegeta walks over to pan and looks her in the eye. Vegeta: I never doubted your power, but again, you are the Sayian Race's last hope, I cannot let anything happen to you, as the protector of earth, I forbid you from fighting any threats that come in the future. Pan looks mad, than she flies away, Uub shakes his head and follows. Goten and Vegeta remain. Vegeta: Goten, get your rest. Tomorrow we are going to work on you reaching the second level of super sayian. Vegeta powers down and flies away, Goten stands there, seemingly worried. Goten: Dad, I wish you were here... Goten flies away in the opposite direction. Chapter 2 Warriors of a time past We see Turtle Island, Tien, Yamcha, Krillin and Chiaotzu they are old and for the most part, retired. Tien however tries his best to stay in shape. Tien: Come on Yamcha, lets spar, for old times sake. Yamcha: Tien man, I'm going to have to pass. Tien: Come on you big baby, Chiaotzu won't spar with me anymore, and I'm sure Krillin wont either, you guys are just gonna lay down and become irrelevant? Krillin: Tien, just sit down and have some tea. Tien: Fine.. Tien sits down and sips his tea, Android 18 walks out with Marron. Android 18: You boys alright out here? Krillin: Yes, thanks for asking honey. Android 18: Well that's good. 18 and Marron sit down, Tien finishes his tea and gives 18 his seat. Tien: Here you go, I think I am gonna go for a fly over to that island, I need to do let off some steam. Chiaotzu: Tien, come on. Yamcha: Stay, its a social event. Tien: Sorry, but you guys all let yourself become irrelevant, look at what we missed out on! All we could do was stand idly by while new threats came, well no more, even 18 got in on more action than we did. Krillin: You leave her out of this! Krillin stands up Tien: Yeah, she did something. We did nothing! All we could do was watch, hide and remember our glory days, well my glory days aren't over yet. Tien flies off to the island, a familiar place, where Goku and Piccolo fought Raditz. Tien starts shadow fighting, and testing out some new battle techniques. Meanwhile back on Turtle Island the group is a little surprised by Tien's outburst. Krillin: Chiaotzu, what is up with Tien? Chiaotzu: I don't know, he has been like this ever since those Shadow Dragons attacked. He has been pushing himself really hard, and I would be lying if I said he wasn't accomplishing anything, I mean his power. I had trouble keeping up with him in a spar 10 years ago, now I don't even bother. Yamcha: Sounds like he is just jealous. Krillin: Yeah, I was jealous before, but I got over it, why can't he just relax? Android 18: I can understand how he feels.. Everyone looks at 18, shocked. Android 18: When My Brother killed you Krillin, I felt helpless and weak. I was able to help Goku, but even still. It is very frustrating to be able to do nothing while the ones you care about are getting hurt. Everyone stands in silence. Android 18: The worst part is being an Android, I can't get any stronger through training. That is a great frustration for me. Atleast Tien is trying, Krillin, you should be protecting me. I think all of you should be doing what Tien is doing, and you should have been for a long time. This is your home. Krillin: Your right, who says we can't be helpful in protecting the world? Yamcha, Chiaotzu lets get to that island. Yamcha: I don't know.... Krillin: Whatever happened to the master of the wolf fang fist? Come on, our friend had the right idea. Yamcha frowns, then he gets up and smiles. Yamcha: Lets do it! Krillin: Chiaotzu, are you in? Chiaotzu: You know what? Why not. Lets Go! The 3 humans get ready to leave, Krillin kisses 18 and the 3 fly off. Upon reaching the Island, they see Tien Meditating under a waterfall. Tien: what are you guys doing here? Krillin: We came here to shape up, got any pointers? Tien stands up. Tien: You guys are going to have to do alot of work, Chiaotzu, Yamcha you two especially, you two spar eachother, Krillin show me your best. Yamcha and Chiaotzu shake hands, they begin to spar, exchanging body and limb blows, they are still very fast for their age. Krillin rushes at Tien, who afterimages behind him and grabs him in an arm lock, Krillin tries to get out, but can't. Tien shoves him away. Tien: Try harder, in fact try and grab me. Krillin afterimages behind Tien, he goes to snatch him, but his body vanishes as he grabs, Tien appears behind Krillin and kicks his leg out, he goes for a a vicious throat chop, stopping inches short of his neck. Krillin: How hard have you been training? Tien: As hard as ever. Tien helps Krillin up. Tien: all 3 of you come at me. The 3 turn and all charge at Tien, who takes them out with 3 simple swipes of his hand. Tien: Free up some time, this is going to take a lot of work. Krillin: I look forward to it. Tien smiles as do the rest. Chapter 3 Burned out legend We see Trunks arriving at Gohan's house, he is greeted by Videl. Videl: Oh, hey Trunks, what brings you here? Trunks: I want to see Gohan, is he around? Videl: Oh yeah, he is just in his study, third door at the top of the stairs. How have you been? Trunks: I have been good, and you? Videl: I've been good. Trunks: How is your father? Videl: He's been okay, just finished filming his latest martial arts instruction tape. Trunks and Videl laugh, at Hercule. Gohan comes outside. Gohan: Trunks! Ha ha! Long time no see! Trunks: yeah Gohan, what have you been doing? Gohan: Just some work, some accounting stuff, boring boring anyway, what brings you here? Trunks: I want to talk to you, why did you stop training? Gohan: Oh you know, the need for me just wasn't alot at the time, with Dad and Vegeta, and Goten and you, I figured I was just an unnecessary pair of hands. Trunks: But you had more potential than anybody in the group, you could have made a rather big difference in the past years. Gohan: Yeah, I know. I just wasn't up for it, and now when I know I may be needed, I feel that it would all be in vein. Trunks: You still have that potential, you just need to rebring it out, and I am willing to help you out, but you need to help me with something. I want to learn your techniques, I want to fight like you. Gohan: Jeez Trunks, I don't even remember how I fight. Trunks: We can help eachother. Come on, for the future. Gohan looks over at Videl, who was eavesdropping from the Kitchen. She smiles at him and nods. Gohan: Alright, I'll give it a shot. Right now I'm tired, but come by tomorrow, right now I have a few calls to make. Gohan walks inside, and Trunks leaves, Gohan picks up the phone. Gohan: Yeah, I won't be able to come in tomorrow, just bring in Don, alright sorry. Bye. Gohan hangs up the phone and goes upstairs, on the wall is a large frame containing his Gi, he takes it off the wall and carefully starts to remove the glass, he puts the Gi on and goes to the backyard of his home, he starts to slowly practice his striking. Chapter 4 Meanwhile, in Hell We see Piccolo, he is trapped in Hell still, awaiting an appeal from King Yemma. Piccolo is heavily protected, due to the fact that he put, or at least was involved in putting many of the patrons in Hell. He sits in the dining hall, most patrons have to eat disgusting food, such as scraps, or even worse, nothing at all. The Guards sneak him good food, because everyone knows he does not belong there. Even with all the heavy guard, Piccolo was still attacked regularly, Frieza and Cell who lost their physical forms, but remained as spirits called all the shots. Piccolo sits, surrounded by guards eating his food. The Residents of Hell were getting ready to try take away his physical form once again. Dodoria and Raditz nod to each other, Raditz grabs a handful of Dodoria's food and eats it, Dodoria stands up and grabs Raditz by the throat. Dodoria: You filthy monkey! Steal my food will you! Dodoria and Raditz start to fight, the guards of hell jump to break it up, leaving Piccolo with only 2 protectors. From behind comes Pui Pui, Jeice and Kogu. Kogu pulls out a crudely made sword and slashes one of the guards down, while Jeice grabs the other guard and blasts him in the stomach. Pui Pui grabs Piccolo from behind and holds his arms, Kogu readies his blade and slashes, Piccolo flips Pui Pui over his back and the blade slashes his back horns off. Jeice throws a Crusher Ball at Piccolo, who deflects it back at him, the ball explodes and sends Jeice into a jagged mountainside. Impaling him. Pui Pui swings at Piccolo, who easily counters with a heavy punch to the stomach, that bursts through and comes out of his back, Piccolo removes his hand and Pui Pui falls to the ground. Kogu swings again, but Piccolo catches the sword and snaps it in half, Kogu throws the sword down and charges at Piccolo. Piccolo: MASENKO HA! Piccolo blows off Kogu's top half off, the guards are being overwhelmed by the evil in hell, more guards are deployed to defuse the situation. The Souls of Frieza and Cell come down to taunt Piccolo. Frieza: Hello Namekian. Piccolo: What is the point of all this Frieza? You can't kill me, nor can you take my body away. Cell: We just like to torment you! The Way we have been tormented for decades! hehehe. suddenly, a Blue Flash wizzes past Piccolo, he feels 10 quick impacts on his body and head and drops down, Burter stands above him. Burter: Fastest being in the other world! HA! Piccolo afterimages behind Burter and snaps his neck, 4 more past foes confront Piccolo. Reccome, Ginger, Yakon and Android 19 Jump Piccolo, but suddenly, everything freezes. accept Piccolo and the Souls of Frieza and Cell. King Yemma is seen from above. Yemma: Piccolo, it is time for your appeal! Piccolo lowers his fists, Frieza and Cell get angry, and try to yell at their henchmen, Piccolo is brought up by a staircase, Frieza and Cell get angry, and start arguing. Piccolo sighs, as he is leaving the patrons unfreeze, they are confused. A few try to run up the stairs and drag Piccolo down, but are instantly blown back. Piccolo reaches the top, where he speaks with King Yemma on his position. Yemma: Name? Piccolo: You just said it... Yemma: Sir, please comply with my requests, I have no problem declining your appeal. Piccolo: My Name is Piccolo Yemma: Hmmm, son of the Demon King, former savior of earth..trashed Heaven, but helped seal the gates of hell...Alright, Piccolo, I hereby grant you passage to heaven, under 100 Living World years of strict prohibition. Another outburst like you did before and you will spend the rest of eternity in Hell, with no hope of Appeal. Any requests or comments? Piccolo: None, Thank you King Yemma. Piccolo returns to heaven, upon reentering he is greeted with a warm welcome from the Heroes of the past, in the distance we see a ring being constructed, a new Other World Tournament is being arranged. Piccolo smiles, and waves to someone, we see that it is none other than Pikkon, who waves back. TBC Edited by Model_O, Oct 24 2012, 01:55 PM.
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| Megasaiyan | Oct 16 2012, 08:28 PM Post #2 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Pretty interesting>9/10 so far, however you left out mentioning Gohan, as if he was dead or something. or weaker that Goten or Trunks What does the BNW stand for? Edited by Megasaiyan, Oct 16 2012, 08:29 PM.
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| Pylons | Oct 17 2012, 12:20 AM Post #3 |
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I liked it alot, looking forward to reading more and your signature is fantastic |
| Let's Go Baby We Rollin'!!! | |
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| Model_O | Oct 17 2012, 04:45 AM Post #4 |
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BNW stands for Brave New World And Gohan isn't dead, he is retired for now... Edited by Model_O, Oct 17 2012, 04:51 AM.
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| Model_O | Oct 17 2012, 05:58 AM Post #5 |
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updated! |
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| Model_O | Oct 18 2012, 07:59 AM Post #6 |
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Updated! |
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| SSJ | Oct 18 2012, 04:44 PM Post #7 |
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Hey I really like this! Great work! |
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| Model_O | Oct 18 2012, 09:05 PM Post #8 |
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UPDATED! |
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| Megasaiyan | Oct 18 2012, 10:36 PM Post #9 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Since when does Piccolo know Pikkon and howcome Tien knows where Goku and Piccolo fought Raddtitz? Still interesting though, like your great grammar |
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| Model_O | Oct 19 2012, 12:33 AM Post #10 |
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okayy, first Tien didn't know where the fight took place, but if I recall, the Island was not far off from Roshi's. He didn't just go there and say "LOL NOSTALGIA" he just went there. as for Piccolo and Pikkon knowing eachother, well you know dem greenies. Seriously though, Piccolo knowing Pikkon is something I pulled out of my ***** and that I will explain later. It's a side story finally, my punctuation may be off. My Grammar as far as I can tell is not that bad. That being said, kiss my balls. |
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| Megasaiyan | Oct 19 2012, 02:52 PM Post #11 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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I meant that I LIKE your grammar, I mean you write pretty well and correctly. |
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| Model_O | Oct 19 2012, 09:53 PM Post #12 |
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OHHHHHHHHHH! Sorry, its hard to tell sarcasm on the internet and I am very self conscious about my writing. I retract my previous ball kissing request LMFAO |
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| Megasaiyan | Oct 20 2012, 02:57 PM Post #13 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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Yeah you should delete that one before some moderator sees it and warns you or something. Just a friendly advice from your friendly neighbourhood...uhm, friend:)) |
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| Model_O | Oct 20 2012, 08:18 PM Post #14 |
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Nah, im this Forum's loose cannon BITCHES! haha Plus my warn level is clean, so I can screw up a bit |
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| Megasaiyan | Oct 21 2012, 03:04 PM Post #15 |
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Osz Karoly Szilard
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What do you mean> forum's loose canon? |
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